Joanne Adylse Lynne

This is very creative, amazing.

Grazie, grazie both of you~! This one actually has a tune to it, which makes it a lullaby. =)

Readers feel your emotions through this poem. I think this is cool except for the part in which you quoted the lyrics from Boys Like Girls, perhaps you could have ...

Sweet child of mine She sleeps in the house of darkest souls Where marble statues of gods come alive At twelve midnight To whisper into her nightmares Casting her fears ...

Thank you for writing the things I'd say to my ex-boyfriend (that is, if I ever talked to him again). This is funny, sarcastic, brilliant.

You described the images of nature, while inserting emotions and thoughts between the lines. Overall it's pretty good.

Beautifully eloquent. Enlighten me, what does "eighteen" have to do with this piece?

@Snoweary and xhellysmx, merci! I'll keep improving! This poem was after all, written to expel the negativity from myself. @Artsy, thank you! This has nothing to do with Deepavali, except ...

Merci! I hope I will write better in future.

If I ever find you It shall be your unending downfall For your acts of blasphemy And your acts of cowardice First I shall make you Bring your knees to ...

It is a very beautiful poem. I suppose, it would be more or less, what good children would want their mothers to hear at their deathbeds or in their afterlives.

Beautiful. It reminds me of a past relationship, so filled with lies to conceal what was never meant to be concealled. If this is written for someone- like the girl ...

Brilliant, you presented what we as avid writers, who make use of our senses and power of observation feel at many times. Hold on, look at the second last paragraph. ...

Instead of our conventional angel and devil, each sitting on one shoulder, trying to tell the protagonist what to do- imagine this. There are two of you, coexisting. You are ...

Merci, everyone! I'll keep improving my writing. I believe I can still do better. Keep writing as well, people!